Rewriting instructions

Task: This was my task for my literacy class. On the left hand side they are examples of clear, simple steps about instructions. But on the right side I just made a few changes to add in.

Pick up an egg, gently hit it against the side of a bowl and empty the contents into a clean bowl.	Pick up an egg and gently hit it on the side of the bowl, then empty out the contents into a bowl.
Open the fridge and take out the butter. Take off the lid. Get a knife and use it to scoop some butter. Rub the knife onto the toast.	Open the fridge and take out the butter, then you take off the lid and you get a knife to scoop out some butter. Then rub the knife onto the toast.
Hold the two shortest sides of paper and bend them together. Squeeze them so that the paper is now in half.	Hold two shortest side of the paper and bend them together, then fold it so that the paper is now in half.
When you hear the sound of the whistle, move one leg in front of the other as quickly as you can.	Once you hear the sound of the whistle, move your right leg in front of your left do it over and over and make it faster as you go.
When player One had rolled the dice, they should hand it to player Two, who should then roll it too. The person with the highest score moves their counter first.	After the first player rolls the dice they should hand it over to the second player to roll. How ever you keep playing the game until there is a winner which will be the person with the most points.
If you want to turn on the computer, look for the round, lack power button and press it once.	If you are wanting to turn on your computer, you look at the back of the device and look for the round button. You then press the button once and you wait for it to turn on.
Hold the handles of the scissors and cut along the dotted line, making sure you don’t hurt yourself.	Hold the handles of the scissors and cut through the dotted lines without cutting yourself.
Before you start mixing the ingredients, switch on the oven and turn the dial to 140 degrees.	Before you start mixing all the ingredients switch on the oven and turn the dial to 140 degrees.
Take the lid off the glue stick and rub the glue on the tab, being careful not to get any glue on your clothes.	Take the lid off the glue stick and rub the glue on the tab, be careful and make sure you don’t get any glue on your clothes.
When you have planted your seed, pick up the pot and move it it near to a window where it will get lots of sunlight.	Once you have planted your seed, pick up the pot and take it near a window where it will get lots of sunshine.